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Monday, December 22nd, 2008 05:06 pm

Title: I Can't
Author: cplberen
Fandom: SG1
Pairing: J/D
Spoilers: None
Rating: R
Word Count: 128
Disclaimer:  Stargate's not mine, yadda yadda
Summary:  It's too much.

 

I Can’t

By cplberen

 

 

I… I…

 

It’s too much. I can’t. 

 

It’s…

 

“Let go, Daniel.”

 

I… I’m going to die. It’s just not possible that a human body can feel this much and not die. It’s as if…

 

“Stop thinking. Let go.”

 

This is just… This is…

 

“Look at me.”

 

Heat and pressure.  And him. Surrounding.  Invading. 

 

Relentless. Driving into me, driving me to…

 

“Daniel, look at me.”

 

I can’t…

 

“Open your eyes.”

 

I…

 

Everything stops. So much pressure. 

 

A drop of sweat, so hot, hits my collarbone. 

 

“Daniel. Open your eyes.”

 

My eyelids lift and dark eyes swim into focus. So much warmth. So much heat.

 

“Let go. I’ve got you.” Absolute confidence.

 

One more stroke and I come apart. My vision whites out, but his eyes…

 

I’m not afraid.

 

“Jack.”

 

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Wednesday, December 24th, 2008 12:01 am (UTC)
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. I started with something longer, but I wanted to strip it down so that it was mostly impression and implication, leaving it for the reader's imagination to flesh out.

::blush:: talking too much. Anyway, I'm glad you liked it.
Thursday, December 25th, 2008 08:47 pm (UTC)
Not talking too much at all! It's great to hear about some of the background work, and your paring-down came out wonderfully.